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| Celtic Radio Community > Short Stories > I've Written A Story! |
| Posted by: gtrplr 21-Dec-2004, 12:29 PM |
| It's too long to post here in the forum, but thanks to MacFive and his hard work on behalf of us HR junkies, you can read it http://gtrplr.celtichearts.com/Ribbon.html Comments, feedback, criticism and donations ( ) are welcomed. |
| Posted by: susieq76 21-Dec-2004, 01:22 PM |
| That was a wonderful story, Randal! Great job!! |
| Posted by: TheCarolinaScotsman 21-Dec-2004, 01:48 PM |
| One word comes to mind, haunting; definitely a haunting story. |
| Posted by: freekenny 21-Dec-2004, 02:09 PM |
| O'siyo gtrplr, ~ Wonderful and entertaining story indeed!  I do have one question..how did the clean, pressed red ribbon become bloody when pulled from his pocket?  Is the reader suppose to believe that when he was 'shot' thats when the ribbon became blood-stained?..Just curious! A story that kept my attention! Great job!~~Sty-U  |
| Posted by: gtrplr 21-Dec-2004, 02:30 PM | ||
Well, that's one explanation. Perhaps the ribbon he pulled from his pocket was the one the landlord's daughter was wearing when she died. Or. . .perhaps someone else will come up with a better explanation.  Thanks for the kind words. I'm glad you all enjoyed it. |
| Posted by: Haldur 21-Dec-2004, 04:59 PM |
| Excellent story! Keep up the craft and let is in on any upcoming works! |
| Posted by: Aaediwen 21-Dec-2004, 08:28 PM |
Wonderful angle on the story  I like it! Great retelling Only thing I saw, maybe it was just me, but a little bit of the dialouge near the beginning got a little too heavy on the 'he said' 'said he' feel. Didn't last long though Nice work! Great story! Definately kept me reading, and some interesting twists in it. |
| Posted by: Rindy1202 21-Dec-2004, 10:40 PM |
That was a wonderful story. Hope you don't mind I printed it and will read to my boys. Keep up the good work!  |
| Posted by: urian 03-Jan-2005, 05:15 PM |
| *turns on Loreena McKennit's "highwayman"* gotta tell ya. I enjoyed the story very much. the way it was told, the use of accents, the twilight zone feel to it was all very nice. It is a very well done piece .  |