Thanks for the comments, I like your ideas. I always try to write stories, but for some reason ( I feel it's Bukowski's fault, haha ) I have a hard time writing clear thought out stories that don't seem to come from a person that is 'falling apart', if that makes any sense. I like to make it somewhat disorganized or 'desperate' for some reason. I have written another paragraph a few months ago that I'll copy to this board after I get out of work. And I'm joking about the Bukowski thing, haha. He gets the utmost respect from me!
and Aaediwen, thanks! I like the suggestion a lot. It brings out more ideas for my writing in general; more thought into the placement and layout of the lines.
Ah, I'm getting tired of writing one sentence, then minimizing, working for a bit, etc.. makes me forget the what I was writing about.. So that's why this is weird and rushed.
Thanks again, both of you!