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Posted by: Sidhe-Mor 21-Mar-2005, 04:45 PM

Thought I'd make a post to see what you guys think ?Stories of the Ancient Times? Magicks of an ancient time Of Earthen power And lay lines Stones in a field An enigma to all Standing in defiance Solid as a wall The drama in the modern times one will find this not here The mysteries of the ancient times They live in our conscious minds A world behind the modern veil Lost in mists to ?enlightened? eyes A truth and world where men once lived In peace with Nature, in peaceful lives With Dana, she who is still here Listen to these bardic tales 'Tis they which carry this ancient story Stories of old, stories of mystery Stories that tell the elder history The dark and the light, there's truth in both So open your heart, and open your mind And welcome the world of the ancient times

Posted by: Sidhe-Mor 21-Mar-2005, 04:48 PM

Those who know me, please don't let on you know who I am.

Posted by: Sidhe-Mor 23-Mar-2005, 07:31 PM

Ok, Maybe people aren't interested. :'( You all know me well. I'm not a new member. I know Wiz, I told you I didn't know who Sidhe-Mor was. I was covering this test. I feel I have my answer now. And can remove the mask. Yes, the above poem is an original work. You know the author as. . . Aaediwen.

Posted by: Aaediwen 23-Mar-2005, 07:40 PM

I posted this piece under an assumed name because I wanted to see what reaction my work would get, on its own merit. Answer, it didn't. I wanted to know the same thing when I made "Water's of Life" my second post here. I sought an answer to a question. That went quite some time before anyone answered. Long enough for me to make myself well known. Long enough for people to try to protect me from their true feelings. Only 11 times was this thread even viewed before falling into oblivion. Appologies to you, my friends. Apparently, at best, a different approach is needed.

Posted by: WizardofOwls 23-Mar-2005, 09:03 PM

Hey buddy! I'm so sorry your test didn't work out! I can't answer for everyone else, but I can tell you why I didn't respond... And PLEASE be aware that I am NOT trying to offend anyone here... just trying to give my honest thoughts... To be honest with you, I really did like this poem. I thought it captured a truly pagan feel to it. I could almost imagine a pagan drum beat, and dark shadows dancing around a bon fire. If your intention was to try to inspire awe at the mystery of the past and to remember those ancient times then you succeeded admirably. However as a Christian, I was afraid to respond becasue I didn't know the religious persuasion of the person posting, and I was afraid that I might inadvertantly say something that might get a religious conflict started. And that would be the LAST thing I'd want to do! Anyway, here is a little constructive criticism... There was one line that I thought was a little difficult for me to understand... "one will find this not here". I assume the intended meaning was "one will not find this here" For some reason I did stumble for a second over that line. I really like the mystery/history rhyme toward the end. Nice! In the last stanza, for some reason, I keep expecting there to be another line between the fifth and sixth lines...dont know why, and "both" would be a difficult word to rhyme with anyway... maybe its becasue you've got the mystery/history rhyme, followed by a rhyme (not sure if it was intentional) on mind/times. That one line just seems odd there between two rhyming lines There.... how's that for comments?

Posted by: Haldur 26-Mar-2005, 06:53 PM

Aaediwen, I love this piece! As for the traffic in CelticHearts, it has been lagging lately. I don't think its necessarily anyone's fault or anything, but it seems that everyone's not being as creative as they should be. As I believe Old Raven commented in another thread (and this is paraphrased of course), "Four word story? I mean, come on!" And sadly its true. No one wants to devote their time to creativity anymore with the exception of you of course, Aaediwen and a few others that sneak in from time to time. I'll step down from my soapbox before the masses start throwing tomatoes and sludge.

Posted by: Rindy1202 26-Mar-2005, 09:02 PM

You may have seen this I am not sure who wrote it but I thought it was kind of neat. I wasn't to sure where to post it, but I thought I best put it in poems. Twas the day before Easter and all through the woods, The bunnies were busy packing their goods. The eggs were all colored so pretty and bright, All things were "go" for the big, special night The baskets were waiting, all decorated with care, In hopes that the Bunny soon would be there. My little brother Sam was asleep in his bed, While visions of Easter eggs rolled round his head. And I in my pajamas with the cat on my lap, I had just settled down for a quick little nap. When outside the window I heard a great noise, I sprang from my chair and jumped over some toys. As quick as a flash to the window I flew, I pulled up the shade and , OH, what a view. The moon on the meadow cast a bright golden glow And the wind blew the flowers to and then fro Then all of a sudden from out of nowhere, Came some lively bunnies, hopping here, hopping there! Leading the group with ears long and funny Was a plump all-white rabbit... That's right...the EASTER BUNNY! The bunnies hopped past, one, two , three, four The rabbit called out and then there were more. "Come Peter! Come, Flopsy! Come, Benny! Come, Joe! Now hop along! Hop along! Hop along! GO!" So up on each doorstep the bunnies did hop, With baskets of eggs. (Let's hope they don't drop)! Just at that moment, on the porch down below, Came the stomping of feet 'Twas the rabbit I know As I stepped from my window I heard a loud sound. Through the door came the rabbit with a leap and a bound. He was furry and soft from his head to his feet. To see him so close was really quite neat

Posted by: WizardofOwls 27-Mar-2005, 04:57 AM

QUOTE (Haldur @ 26-Mar-2005, 07:53 PM) As I believe Old Raven commented in another thread (and this is paraphrased of course), "Four word story? I mean, come on!" Now That Haldur has gotten off of his soap box, I'm gonna get on one. I'm not trying to start anything here, just expressing my opinion. I am really tired of people dumping on the 4 word story. You know, there are alot of threads here, and many of them I have no interest in. But you know what? If I don't like a thread, I simply DON'T READ IT! I don't dump on that thread everywhere and at every opportunity I get, because I know that there are others who DO like it. So, out of KINDNESS to my friends and RESPECT for their feelings, I simply stay silent. That is an art that MANY around here would do well to learn. Okay, so 4 word story is not major literature, its not deep, its not philosophical. But for a forum of this size to be successful it MUST cater to the needs of all types of people. There are those who are looking for deep reading material, to get involved in an aggressive analytical study of a piece of writing. And sometimes I DO enjoy htat sort of thread. Then there are those of us who have just worked a 12 hour shift, have just gotten home from work and have NO DESIRE to get involved in something so deep. We just want something light and fun to lighten our moods. If that is not to your taste, then CHANGE THE CHANNEL! But don't dump on it. Nobody wants to hear it! Least of all a tired grumpy old man who has worked all day and enjoys the chuckles that the 4 Word Story, Word Association and the Question Only threads can provide. The Wizard steps off the soap box and says "Next?"

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