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urian Posted on: 20-Dec-2006, 02:53 PM

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As someone who’s been published I know how hard it is to get out there and how brutal things can be. Hence the harsh critique. I don’t do the PC feel good reviews.

The publishing world isn't all nice and cushy. I've been picked apart and spat back out by fellow authors and editors alike. Sometimes even the acceptance letters are harsh.
If someone has the desire to publish their work they have to have a thick skin as it were. Otherwise they’re in for a lot of hurt feelings. It's a sad dose of reality but the publishing industry is so very cut throat that one can't go into it with rose colored glasses. To do so would be folly.

You think my critique too harsh? Sorry that I seem to have hurt your delicate sensibilities.

Mind you I’m assuming this but; in posting his work, he either wanted accolades or critiques. Accolades I don't give lightly. And I'm not a froo froo touchy feely kinda person. I'd rather give (and take) honest, forthright criticism than smoke being blown up my rear. I’m sure that, as a writing teacher, you can appreciate that.

In the long run, if he is to survive in the publishing world, he needs to know his faults and be able to take people being big meanie heads. If you want a real meanie head, ask someone like Piers Anthony to critique some work. He’s vicious. He makes me look like a harmless little ball of fluff. But I digress.

And, if he only wanted accolades, he should have specified he didn’t want reviews. None of this was personal. I offered my opinion on his work. Period.

“But don't be discouraged -- this is just one writing teacher talking.” Aww. I guess I’m supposed to feel hurt, huh? I’ll try really hard to sulk.

I call them as I see them. Very cut and dry. Like I said before, the publishing world is not a playground and people should be aware of that. But, hey, I’m just a published author. What do I know about things of that nature, huh?

Four posts in a day. I think I’ve broken my record for the past year. I’m gone. Maybe I’ll pop back in six months from now or so.

To Old raven, wizardofowls, Aaediwen, Haldur and any others that may remember me, Take care, God Bless, Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

Peace be with all of you in the coming year.
Urian Shokar Lightbringer


P.S. John, if you are looking for online writing communities that will help you in developing your work (let’s face it we all need help) try places like writing.com. They offer large communities with people that will help you to develop your work in the way that would fit your style.
  Forum: Short Stories  ·  Post Preview: #178004

urian Posted on: 20-Dec-2006, 11:56 AM

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OK, so I hit the post button before I could sort it out. No one's perfect.




Her name was Kitty and she called me Sweet Pea, being from New Orleans, and all. Except for the subway token I needed to get home with that night. (Period should be a comma otherwise it’s a fragment.)


I had spent all the cash I had, having taken Kitty out to dinner, down in the West Village, which was where she lived at the time. (HUH? That’s like two sentences in one. You need to find a way to reword this so it is more readable. Something like:” After taking Kitty to dinner in the West Village, Where she lived at the time, I was flat broke.” Or something like that.)



I’m not exactly sure what time it was, but I know it must have been around three in the morning. (Here you are using both past AND present tense. That needs to be rectified. Since you started with a word WAS I am going to assume it’s supposed to be in past tense so it should read more like:” I WASN’T sure what time it was(no comma) but I KNEW it must have been around dawn(or morning)).



When I dropped that token in the slot, and found my self, standing alone, on the subway platform, at Union Square, waiting for the up town Lexington Avenue. (Again,HUH? Firstly, you are way to comma happy. You need to use them less than what you did in this piece of flash fiction. 5 in one sentence is way too much. Secondly, I think it should be myself and not my self. I’m not really sure what your trying to say here but I’m trying. Maybe:” I found myself standing alone as I dropped the token and waited for the up town to Lexington from Union Square.)


Well, at least I thought I was alone, until I felt a shadow come over me, from behind. (Again with the commas. Drop the WELL and just say:” I thought I was alone until I felt a shadow come over me. Saying the shadow is from behind becomes redundant as you mention you turn around in the next sentence.)

At which point I turned, to see some huge homeless guy. Who had to be, at least twice my size, casting that shadow. (Ok, these should be one sentence. “Who had to be…” sounds like a question more than anything else.” Plus stop with the commas. They don’t make you sound like a better writer. The fact is that they are just breaking up the flow and causing confusion. If you wish to keep them separate sentences then reword the second sentence:” I turned to see a huge homeless man. He had to be twice my size if he were casting a shadow that large.”)


Of course he heeled out his hand, and asked me for some money, but as you already know, I didn’t have any choice, but to say that I didn’t have any money. (*sigh* Ok. It shouldn’t be heeled. It should be HELD. COMMAS COMMAS COMMAS. This could also be two sentences:” He HELD out his hand and asked me for money. But, sadly, I didn’t have any choice but to tell him I had no money. )

At which point, he got in my face, and said, in a loud threatening voice. (OK. You need to stop with the “at which point” schtick. Find a thesaurus ro something. AND STOP WITH THE COMMAS FOR CRIPES SAKE.” He stepped toward me, breath reeking of stale cigarettes and cheap whiskey. His teeth green and rotted and his tongue coated with white sores.” )


Don’t give me that crap, man, look at you. You’ve wearing fine shoes, and fine clothes. Now give me some money. (OK. This is a quote. Right? Dialog? Then you should have quotation marks around it. Dialogs start their own paragraphs as well. However, this should be fine. Plus it should be YOU’RE and not YOU’VE:” Don’t give me that crap, man. Just look at you wearing fine shoes and clothes. Give me the money, punk.” )

Needless to say, he scared the hell out of me, but I managed to return fire, and say, in an equally threatening voice. (Drop the “needless to say” thing. It’s adding too many commas into your piece. Plus, if you’re going to follow this up with dialog, you need to use colons and QUOTATIONS MARKS:” Having been scared but unwilling to show it I answered him in an equally threatening tone:”)

Let me ask you man. Do you think, that if I had any money, that I would be down in this hole, with you, at three o’clock in the morning? No way man, I’d be up stars in a cab. With that being said, he laughed and went away. (The first sentence should have a comma since you’re addressing someone:” Let me ask you something, man.” Way too many THATS as well: ”If I had any money do you think I’d be stuck in this hole with you at three o’clock in the morning?” No need to use man again because it becomes redundant. But, if you do, you a comma there: “Not a chance. I’d be up the STAIRS [not stars] riding in a cab.
Enough with the preambles in EVERY sentence. It’s useless when done in the EXCESS you use it:” He stared me down making me more nervous than before. After an eternity, he smirked at me, laughed and walked away.” )

You need to go back and do A LOT of work on this. You need to take a creative writing class or something.
But don’t be discouraged. This is just one critique
285 words, 37 commas
That’s, roughly, a comma every 7 words!
  Forum: Short Stories  ·  Post Preview: #177990

urian Posted on: 20-Dec-2006, 11:47 AM

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Her name was Kitty and she called me Sweet Pea, being from New Orleans, and all. Except for the subway token I needed to get home with that night. (Period should be a comma otherwise it’s a fragment.) I had spent all the cash I had, having taken Kitty out to dinner, down in the West Village, which was where she lived at the time. (HUH? That’s like two sentences in one. You need to find a way to reword this so it is more readable. Something like:” After taking Kitty to dinner in the West Village, Where she lived at the time, I was flat broke.” Or something like that.) I’m not exactly sure what time it was, but I know it must have been around three in the morning. Here you are using both past AND present tense. That needs to be rectified. Since you started with a word WAS I am going to assume it’s supposed to be in past tense so it should read more like:” I WASN’T sure what time it was(no comma) but I KNEW it must have been around dawn(or morning). When I dropped that token in the slot, and found my self, standing alone, on the subway platform, at Union Square, waiting for the up town Lexington Avenue. Again,HUH? Firstly, you are way to comma happy. You need to use them less than what you did in this piece of flash fiction. 5 in one sentence is way too much. Secondly, I think it should be myself and not my self. I’m nor really sure what your trying to say here but I’m trying. Maybe:” I found myself standing alone as I dropped the token and waited for the up town to Lexington from Union Square. Well, at least I thought I was alone, until I felt a shadow come over me, from behind. Again with the commas. Drop the WELL and just say:” I thought I was alone until I felt a shadow come over me. Saying the shadow is from behind becomes redundant as you mention you turn around in the next sentence. At which point I turned, to see some huge homeless guy. Who had to be, at least twice my size, casting that shadow. Ok, these should be one sentence. “Who had to be…” sounds like a question more than anything else.” Plus stop with the commas. They don’t make you sound like a better writer. The fact is that they are just breaking up the flow and causing confusion. If you wish to keep them separate sentences then reword the second sentence:” I turned to see a huge homeless man. He had to be twice my size if he were casting a shadow that large.” Of course he heeled out his hand, and asked me for some money, but as you already know, I didn’t have any choice, but to say that I didn’t have any money. *sigh* Ok. It shouldn’t be heeled. It should be HELD. COMMAS COMMAS COMMAS. This could also be two sentences:” He HELD out his hand and asked me for money. But, sadly, I didn’t have any choice but to tell him I had no money. At which point, he got in my face, and said, in a loud threatening voice. OK. You need to stop with the “at which point” schtick. Find a thesaurus ro something. AND STOP WITH THE COMMAS FOR CRIPES SAKE.” He stepped toward me, breath reeking of stale cigarettes and cheap whiskey. His teeth green and rotted and his tongue coated with white sores.” Don’t give me that crap, man, look at you. You’ve wearing fine shoes, and fine clothes. Now give me some money. OK. This is a quote. Right? Dialog? Then you should have quotation marks around it. Dialogs start their own paragraphs as well. However, this should be fine. Plus it should be YOU’RE and not YOU’VE:” Don’t give me that crap, man. Just look at you wearing fine shoes and clothes. Give me the money, punk.” Needless to say, he scared the hell out of me, but I managed to return fire, and say, in an equally threatening voice. Drop the “needless to say” thing. It’s adding too many commas into your piece. Plus, if you’re going to follow this up with dialog, you need to use colons and QUOTATIONS MARKS:” Having been scared but unwilling to show it I answered him in an equally threatening tone:” Let me ask you man. Do you think, that if I had any money, that I would be down in this hole, with you, at three o’clock in the morning? No way man, I’d be up stars in a cab. With that being said, he laughed and went away. The first sentence should have a comma since you’re addressing someone:” Let me ask you something, man.” Way too many THATS as well: ”If I had any money do you think I’d be stuck in this hole with you at three o’clock in the morning?” No need to use man again because it becomes redundant. But, if you do, you a comma there: “Not a chance. I’d be up the STAIRS (not stars) riding in a cab.”
Enough with the preambles in EVERY sentence. It’s useless when done in the EXCESS you use it:” He stared me down making me more nervous than before. After an eternity, he smirked at me, laughed and walked away.”

You need to go back and do A LOT of work on this. You need to take a creative writing class or something.
But don’t be discouraged. This is just one critique
285 words, 37 commas
That’s, roughly, a comma every 7 words!
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  Forum: Short Stories  ·  Post Preview: #177989

urian Posted on: 20-Dec-2006, 11:00 AM

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Yeah, so I really don't show up here anymore but I felt compelled to pop on by. No clue why. But I get here and see this and feel I need to share my two cents on this subject since I have experience with these people.


I was first "accepted" back in 98. I thought it was great that a poem of mine was accepted. To top that off they were giving me the chance to buy a copy of the book at a discount. WOW! Well, I couldn't fork over the money at that point in time so I declined.

I continued to get acceptance letters for the books and for the spoken word cds.
I had a friend of mine get accepted into one of the same ones I was accepted into so he spent the 70 bucks or whatever the cost was and we sat down to read our published work. Interestingly, his work was in there but mine wasn't. Hmmmm

So I ordered a spoken word CD that I was part of. Yeah, that was a rip off.

Then, in 2000, I was invited to attend a convention (and I've been invited to one every year since). I was even going to be awarded with the coveted PROMETHUS MUSE OF FIRE AWARD for the best poet of the new millennium. All I had to do was become a member of the "society" for a few hundred bucks plus 600 bucks for hotel and then the plane ticket.
Well, I couldn't afford any of that so I wrote them and asked them to just send my award. I got a letter back saying they'd send it to me if I'd pay the shipping (umm...ok) and the price of the award. Soooo I had to pay 200 bucks if I wanted an "AWARD" that I supposedly won? Riiight!


The letters all start similarly (Mind you I’m trying to remember off the top of my head). Something like:" Imagine, a hush falls over the crowd as they announce *insert name and poem title here* as the winner and finest poet blah blah blah.

I've probably broken your heart and I'm sorry if I did but I'd rather you be as informed as possible about this before you get your hopes up.
  Forum: Poems  ·  Post Preview: #177985

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urian Posted on: 03-Aug-2006, 02:07 PM

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Just a heads up about my book.
It is now avail on amazon, book a million(Bamm.com), barnes and nobles, etc. Just search under "m lovell" and it's called shadows.
This also means it's avail in brick and mortar stores for ordering.

be warned, though, the stories in the book are not for the weak at heart.



god bless you all
and peace be with you

Urian

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urian Posted on: 19-Jun-2006, 02:12 PM

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My book will be available on Barnes and Noble, Amazon, Books-a-millions, etc. and in brick and mortar stores in about 30 days.
It is, however, available on the publisher’s site right now.



"Shadows" by Micheal Lovell

If it's not Kosher to post these kinds of links then I'm sorry and any interested can email me.

peace be with you all.
Michael

Mod note: The link to the publisher has been disabled.
  Forum: Short Stories  ·  Post Preview: #152356

urian Posted on: 09-Dec-2005, 04:07 PM

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urian Posted on: 09-Dec-2005, 04:05 PM

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urian Posted on: 09-Dec-2005, 04:02 PM

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Thanks for the welcome , Wiz, but I very seriously doubt I'm back. I'm more like the splinter in your side that you forget is there until you move just the wrong way and feel it.
I posted for no other reason than to let people know I was still around, alive, kicking and calling BS where and when I need to as well as posting rants and ramblings from time to time.
Thanks again, though.

P.s. That's a great pic of you and the kids Wiz! Miss talking with ya

dont think this is much for this crowd and i dont like the sound of the edited version but eh...see you guys around in another 6 months

Yeah you know me.
I’m the bum in your face
The book that’s out of place
I’m the backwash of the human race
I’m the bug in your ear
The zit on your nose
I’m that bird stuff that lands on your shirt as you stoop to pick a rose
Yeah
You know me
I’m the disappointment in your dads voice when you flunked
The disillusionment in your kid’s eyes when they catch you playing Santa
I’m the sacrilege on Sunday
The hangover on Monday
I’m the headache by midweek
And the pink slip on Friday.
I’m the “Oh, baby, we can still be friends.”
The romantic night that
Thirty seconds later
Comes to a sad, swift, short end.
Yeah you know me.
I’m the man of your dreams that’s 20 years too old
The perfect home that just got sold
I’m the sunset you miss because you’re too damned busy finding a way to capture the moment.
I’m the road kill stuck under your car
The woman that gave you coughs at the bar
I am the suicide that goes awry and leaves you with nothing more than one less eye
And a white jacket in a padded cell
I am the if and buts
The maybes
And the Oh Shucks
I am what you don’t want
But what wants you
I am the drama and your strife
I am your dysfunctional life
Yeah
You know me




  Forum: Poems  ·  Post Preview: #133719

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urian Posted on: 05-Dec-2005, 02:07 PM

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10 minutes past the laughter
The crowd has gone and now there’s just mindless chatter
And you
Standing next to me
You reach your hand out
For me
While I’m still learning to breathe
The water filling my lungs
You pull me from the depths
Where heartache and anglerfish dwell
I gasped for breath
But found your lips waiting
And smiling
Like a long lost friend
And life long lover
So, as it nears 20 past a cry
I hold you in my hands
Mercury no longer
Hopes made flesh
Flesh made reality
Dreams fullfilled
  Forum: Poems  ·  Post Preview: #133178

urian Posted on: 13-Oct-2005, 12:04 PM

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Beautifully done, Danann. bravo
  Forum: Poems  ·  Post Preview: #129242

urian Posted on: 07-Oct-2005, 12:06 PM

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Often times the word home is associated very closely with a physical place. A house or building where someone spent years of their life or a place where many good things may have happened to them.
I sat down the other day and counted up the number of times I remember moving and changing houses. 30. 30 times in 30 years of my life. So, by the traditional standard, I have no home to call my own. However, I tend to view the world a bit differently than most people.
A home for me has always been a place where I could feel comfortable, safe, and let my gaurd down. a place where I could be myself and express myself without ridicule.
for a time Celtic was a place where I felt that way. There have been place where I have felt like that in real life as well. My home town, for example. Mind you, its not a home town in the traditional sense because I only lived there for a year or so when I was around 3. But, most of my father's relatives are there and I have a great many happy memories about the entire town. Once I drive into it I feel my gaurd dropping and I know I can be myself and the people there love me no matter what.
I think, to make a short story long, home truly is a place of sanctuary, security, and love....where the heart is.
  Forum: Philosophy & Science  ·  Post Preview: #128798

urian Posted on: 06-Oct-2005, 03:13 PM

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just...looking around
  Forum: General Discussion  ·  Post Preview: #128730

urian Posted on: 10-May-2005, 10:49 AM

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ok..as long as you dont flog me..or make me eat green beans..ugh tongue.gif


  Forum: Art Work  ·  Post Preview: #116141

urian Posted on: 09-May-2005, 03:41 PM

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QUOTE (Aaediwen @ 06-May-2005, 09:48 PM)
Hey Urian, the top pic is awesome. The fairy is pretty too, Although you might be better off to actually host her somewhere else and just link back here.

I thought I had. oops. sorry.
so..once in a year I boo boo tongue.gif
  Forum: Art Work  ·  Post Preview: #116034

urian Posted on: 05-May-2005, 10:36 PM

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user posted image

Faerie

user posted image

the faerie and the yin yang are brushes

mod note: edited post containing artistic nudity to a link instead of an in-line image tag.
  Forum: Art Work  ·  Post Preview: #115725

urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 09:51 PM

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QUOTE (Rindy1202 @ 27-Apr-2005, 10:40 PM)
QUOTE (urian @ 27-Apr-2005, 09:04 PM)
AMEN!

I think that its a situantional thing. The question can't' be answered with a simple yes or no.
If its just a child acting up like some do in school. then no.
But, if it is like the florida girl or some child (when I say child I am refering to anyone in school even the 15-17 year olds) fighting or being destructive then yes, handcuff them and beat the parents.

What more kids(and parents) need these days is a nice ,swift swat in the rear

laugh.gif laugh.gif laugh.gif

What parents huh? Most parents are too busy with their own lives..CRAZY world out there..

Slainte

You should never be too busy to be involved in your children's lives. I learned this the hard way. I spent too many years of Logan's young life climbing the corporate ladder when I should have been playing with him. Too many nights working when I should have been tucking him in. Too many weekends at work instead of the zoo.
Too many people have kids these days and seem to rely on everyone else to raise them. Grandparents, teachers, clergy are all expected to raise kids when it is the parent's duty to do so. They brought them into this world and it is their obligation to insure that their offspring are raised, taught the proper morals and ehtics, nutured and disciplined. It is too often these days that parents say" I just dont have time." Thats a load of BS. Put down the remote, your work, the PC, the bottle, whatever and pick up your kids or a glove or a book..something. Be a friggin parent.
It doesnt take a village to raise a child..it takes PARENTS! Thats whats wrong (ok..one of many things) with this world..too many people not taking responsibility for their failure as parents or even bothering with their kids to begin with.
IF this (or any) generation fails it is on the heads of the parents who neglected them or half-assed raised them.
Forget scheduling your child's day from waking til sleep. forget "play dates" and 18 hours of scheduled events just to get them out of your hair. Forget what you've read from childless "experts" about how to raise a kid. Just Love, teach , show by action and example, and (when needed) discipline your kids. Or this world is going to go further down the pooper.

There is NEVER a time that is too hectic for your kids. If there is..you dont need them.

I will stop before I get on my soap box..
there is always time for your kids
  Forum: Quizes & Polls  ·  Post Preview: #114978

urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 09:37 PM

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QUOTE (Keltic @ 27-Apr-2005, 10:16 PM)
Right now... the news. Tomorrow at this time, Motorhead!!! Went to see Motorhead about 20 years ago when I lived in Houston but they apparently had a bit too much fun a few nights earlier and ended up cancelling.

With all due respect, Keltic.... tongue.gif


ooooooo...you get to see lemmy and da boys, huh?
I am jealous..sooo jealous...

have a great time!!!

Playing Motorhead's ace of spades for ya*ignites lighter in the dark and waves it*
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urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 09:23 PM

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Here's another one from the same cemetary(scottsville).
It is an absolutely reverent and somber place that , if you listen, echoes the past with screams

My brother's pieces that I thought some of you would enjoy

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  Forum: Photography  ·  Post Preview: #114974

urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 09:05 PM

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Tori amos-me and a gun
  Forum: Quizes & Polls  ·  Post Preview: #114972

urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 09:04 PM

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QUOTE (VetteGal @ 27-Apr-2005, 02:42 AM)
I am really tired of all this bleeding heart garbage about how to discipline a child. Time-outs don't work, most of us grew up with getting spanked and punished for doing something wrong. Enough of all this you can't spank or hit of they act up. All this started because some idiots later in life decided that all their trouble were because their parents hit them as children. Granted, some children were probably abused when young, but it has now gone too far in that if a parent even threatens to spank a child, they have to worry about DCFS showing up. I really with the government would stay the heck out of my life and I'm sure plenty of other's feel the same. It really is 1984. And I also say to heck with the saying 'Spare the rod, spoil the child', I do believe they learn more from the well deserved spanking or slap on the hand if it is neccessary to get the point across. And most of these problems we have today with out children are from the liberals who had to put their nose where it doesn't belong!

AMEN!

I think that its a situantional thing. The question can't' be answered with a simple yes or no.
If its just a child acting up like some do in school. then no.
But, if it is like the florida girl or some child (when I say child I am refering to anyone in school even the 15-17 year olds) fighting or being destructive then yes, handcuff them and beat the parents.

What more kids(and parents) need these days is a nice ,swift swat in the rear
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urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 08:03 PM

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QUOTE (Aaediwen @ 27-Apr-2005, 08:20 PM)
Sounds like the beginnings of a mind wandering after something bad happening. maybe continue it?

I dont call this ramblings for nothing tongue.gif
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urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 08:01 PM

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There is a graveyard about an hour from here. Its an old civil war graveyard with some of the most beautiful monuments you can ever imagine. People have come from all over the world(ok..all over america) to photograph this little memorial to the shattering of the nation.
I have taken a few but my brother(who is the real photographer) as taken session after session out there.
If I can convince him to overcome his shyness I will post some of his stuff. It would do heim good to get unbiased feedback.
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urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 07:04 PM

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thanks guys.

the carved look in Calligrapy was a complete accident. I was trying to do a pice with an "excorcist" feel to it and ended up with that.

glad you both lilked the other
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urian Posted on: 27-Apr-2005, 06:43 PM

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For the first time since the two had met, Ashleigh saw fear in Killian's eyes.
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