Little Feedback Please, something I've been working on a while..

Great songs are poetry. You know the type, the ones that cut straight to the bone. This is a song I wrote that started out as poem and evolved into what it is now. I wanted to get some feedback as me and the band I'm in are thinking about recording it. Suggestions are welcome. All the background info you need: I meet girl. I fall hard and fast. Girl wants to be with me too but is scared to pull the trigger. She was obviously hurt by someone before. This was written on a real bleak night when I was thinking about moving on. Just know that everything is true, the feelings, the girl, etc. Here goes:

Sweet Brittany

So it comes to this/ Never even made it to the first kiss/ It was almost a great ride/ I wonder if I even crossed her mind/ Sweet lady it's time to move on/ When its heen so long/ Since I stood up for myself/ Just add another notch to your shelf//Chorus: Sweet Brittany used to burn so bright/ Now I strain just to catch a flicker/ Sweet Brittany used to burn so bright/ Damn shame I never got the chance to heal her// Time to close another cold Lubbock night/ This old dog just lost the will to fight/ No more feeling beaten and bruised/ No more feeling weak and misused/ I've been waiting on her so long now/ But there's two think I know/ Never could get the words right/ And maybe I'd be sober with her in my life//Chorus// It's been so long now since I've seen her face/ So I took another to fill the space/ Never could quite drink her away/ The girl I wake up next to reminds me of her everyday//Chorus//

Let me know what you think! And for the record, I haven't given up on her.

I re-formatted it to look better on screen, and it really reads well. Nice work There are a couple lines I'd trim up a tad, personally. But then may be just me. Here's the main thing I would change, as I would change it to: